tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2274987097756433491.post4358162403671138354..comments2024-03-05T11:26:21.204-06:00Comments on All the World's Our Page: Between the Lines: ExcerptUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2274987097756433491.post-72976791020584035222009-10-20T01:42:18.221-05:002009-10-20T01:42:18.221-05:00Heidi- lovely to "see" you again! I was ...Heidi- lovely to "see" you again! I was just reading back through some of the Firsts workshop stuff yesterday and I was wondering how you were doing :) Hope you're well.<br /><br />And Rach- well spotted! This scene was formerly the never-ending walk up the driveway, and I thought a bit of Lionel's voice would introduce him and the sense of conflict a lot faster, and without the need for six or so paragraphs of introspection (wg)Claire Ghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15286952159573145712noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2274987097756433491.post-59664611070942591122009-10-19T22:38:56.346-05:002009-10-19T22:38:56.346-05:00I still LOVE this opening, Claire. Wonderful.
And...I still LOVE this opening, Claire. Wonderful.<br /><br />And is this new?<br /><br />>>>His brother's voice was in his head again. You got something better to do?<br /><br />He sighed. "Nup." And he knew what Lionel would've said next, too.<br /><br />Then bloody get on with it.<<<<br /><br />It really evokes that typical, taciturn, Aussie bloke attitude of "no use complaining; won't fix anything." I know WAY too many blokes just like that!<br /><br />Great snip to introduce your work; and, to echo everyone else, I can't wait to read the finished product!Rachel Walshhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15406943046329566026noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2274987097756433491.post-26484613151810256782009-10-19T21:42:38.761-05:002009-10-19T21:42:38.761-05:00Hi Claire
I've read this bit on the forum at...Hi Claire <br /><br />I've read this bit on the forum at one poin - I think during a first's exercise - and loved it just as much this time round. I'm not a regular on there by any stretch but like to pop in now and then to see what everyone is up to. I'm so glad I found this blog. You guys are an inspiring bunch and don't we all need a bit of inspiration these days! Keep these great posts coming.<br /><br />HeidiHeidihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06351598594013934291noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2274987097756433491.post-7342509920714096812009-10-19T19:35:11.227-05:002009-10-19T19:35:11.227-05:00Thanks guys :)
Imagine how impatient *I* am to ge...Thanks guys :)<br /><br />Imagine how impatient *I* am to get back to all this when it's sitting untouched as a sh*tty first draft! The day I can really truly write The End is going to be a very happy one indeed.Claire Ghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15286952159573145712noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2274987097756433491.post-2588923287800671502009-10-19T16:16:59.324-05:002009-10-19T16:16:59.324-05:00As always, this leaves a lump in my throat. It'...As always, this leaves a lump in my throat. It's just so good. <br /><br />-waiting for the day when I can read this --with growing impatience! LOLKristen Callihanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01448274676402616525noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2274987097756433491.post-70858190010977407182009-10-19T15:03:29.644-05:002009-10-19T15:03:29.644-05:00LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE _LOVE_ it! Well done. :)LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE _LOVE_ it! Well done. :)Jennifer Hendrenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01239194419535919631noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2274987097756433491.post-57403424013380119372009-10-19T09:27:10.395-05:002009-10-19T09:27:10.395-05:00Oooh, I'd forgotten how much the first page re...Oooh, I'd forgotten how much the first page really makes the reader want to get to know Bill. It's so much *inside* his pov! Love this line "He was learning to make everything blank in his head, to let the night in and fill the spaces with darkness so none of the sharpest memories could rattle around."Deniz Bevanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17134553551048836979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2274987097756433491.post-16280620972677359962009-10-19T08:27:56.214-05:002009-10-19T08:27:56.214-05:00Thanks Jill :) It took me a really long time to de...Thanks Jill :) It took me a really long time to decide what to post, and in the end I decided to make it easy and just go with the first page :)Claire Ghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15286952159573145712noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2274987097756433491.post-44014053456248256012009-10-19T05:07:40.047-05:002009-10-19T05:07:40.047-05:00Hi Claire, that is a really moving excerpt. It'...Hi Claire, that is a really moving excerpt. It's a great introduction to your work and evokes the landscape and Bill really well. The language is Australian but not overtly, just enough idiom to place us. I love your story, you know that anyway, but this was really nice to see. I'd pick up that book and keep reading.<br />cheers<br />JillJill McCawhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17811882520145188955noreply@blogger.com